The Fog Index
Posted on Monday, April 29, 2013 at 11:44 PM
Assessing the readability of a NYTimes.com excerpt.
This
month, we calculate the Fog Index in an April 27, 2013, article on
NYTimes.com ("How
Big Data Is Playing Recruiter for Specialized Workers" by Matt
Richtel). Here's the excerpt:
"David Lewin, a professor at the
University of California, Los Angeles, and an expert in management of
human resources, said that asking what someone could do was an important
question, but so was asking whether the person could accomplish it with
other people. Of all the efforts to predict whether someone will perform
well in an organization, the most proven method, Dr. Lewin said, is a
referral from someone already working there. Current employees know the
culture, he said, and have their reputations and their work environment
on the line. A recent study from the Yale School of Management that uses
Big Data offers a refinement to the notion, finding that employee
referrals are a great way to find good hires but that the method tends
to work much better if the employee making the referral is highly
productive."
--Word count: 139 words
--Average sentence
length: 35 words (43, 29, 18, 49)
--Words with 3+ syllables: 12
percent (16/139 words)
--Fog Index: (35+12)*.4 = 18 (no rounding)
Here
is our attempt to cut the Fog:
"UCLA professor David Lewin, an
expert in human resource management, said that asking what someone could
do was important. So was asking whether the person could do it with
other people. Of all the efforts to predict whether someone will perform
well in an organization, the most proven method, Dr. Lewin said, is a
referral from someone who works there. Current employees know the
culture, he said. Their reputations and their work environment are on
the line. A recent Yale School of Management study that uses Big Data
offers a refinement to the notion, finding that employee referrals are a
great way to find good hires. But that method tends to work much better
if the employee making the referral is highly productive."
--Word
count: 124 words
--Average sentence length: 18 words (19, 12, 29, 7,
10, 29, 18)
--Words with 3+ syllables: 10 percent (13/124 words)
--Fog
Index: (18+10)*.4 = 11 (no rounding)
We didn't want to reinvent
the wheel here. The average sentence length was high, but we didn't want
to ruin the cadence by splitting up too many sentences. We made some
minor tweaks to reduce the percentage of longer words by 2 percent. We
also split up a few sentences in places we thought logical to bring down
the Fog score. Ultimately, we were able to reduce the piece by 7 points
without making any major changes.
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Comment:
"Said that" ... "Dr. Lewin said" ... "he said" ... hmm, looks like
they should have let the good dr. speak for himself via some
direct quotations; would be much easier to read. --Dan Walsh, editor-in-chief, Mobile Beat