The Fog Index
Posted on Sunday, July 29, 2018 at 1:55 PM
Assessing the readability of a Sciencemag.org excerpt.
This
month, we're calculating the Fog Index of an excerpt from a July 25
Sciencemag.org article ("Liquid
Water Spied Deep Below Polar Ice Cap on Mars" by Daniel Clery).
Here is the sample text, with longer words italicized:
"The radar
brightness alone isn't enough to prove that liquid water is responsible.
Another clue comes from the permittivity of the reflecting material:
its ability to store energy in an electric field.
Water has a higher permittivity than rock and ice. Calculating
permittivity requires knowing the signal power reflected
by the bright patch, something the researchers could only estimate.
But they find the permittivity of the patch to be higher than
anywhere else on Mars -- and comparable to the subglacial
lakes on Earth. Although the team cannot measure the thickness of the
water layer, Orosei says it is much more than a thin film."
--Word
count: 104 words
--Average sentence length: 17 words (13, 19, 9, 18,
24, 21)
--Words with 3+ syllables: 14 percent (15/104 words)
--Fog
Index: (17+14) *.4 = 12 (12.4, no rounding)
Overall, though, the
writer conveys the information clearly without getting lost in the fog.
But we need to cut a point from the Fog Index to fall within ideal
range. Can a simple edit to the third sentence do the trick?
"The
radar brightness alone isn't enough to prove that liquid water is
present. Another clue comes from the permittivity of the
reflecting material: its ability to store energy in
an electric field. Water has a higher permittivity than
rock and ice. To gauge permittivity, one must know the signal
power reflected by the bright patch, something the researchers
could only estimate. But they find the permittivity of the
patch to be higher than anywhere else on Mars -- and comparable
to the subglacial lakes on Earth. Although the team cannot
measure the thickness of the water layer, Orosei says it is much more
than a thin film."
--Word count: 106 words
--Average
sentence length: 18 words (13, 19, 9, 20, 24, 21)
--Words with 3+
syllables: 11 percent (12/106 words)
--Fog Index: (18+11) *.4 =
(11.6, no rounding)
We had our work cut out for us, particularly
with the four-time usage of the word "permittivity." We had trouble
cutting any of these instances, so we had to direct our efforts
elsewhere. In the end, all it took was a word swap in the first sentence
and a minor recast in the third sentence. We gained a point in average
sentence length and two words in the overall count, but we cut a point
from our score.
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